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Monday 7 November 2016

Room 9 Writing this week


Hi I am Brooklyn. This is me writing about a my experiences when I went to my grandpa's house by the beach. 


Hurray! It is holiday time. I went to the beach with my grandpa. I picked up a seaweed. I said " What is this grandpa?"  My Grandpa said, " Leave it. Its the treasure of the beach." 
I asked grandpa, "what is seaweed?" Grandpa said "it is the plant that grows in the sea and fishes like to eat it. It is slimy."
So I put it back in the water for the fishes to eat it. I had a great time at the beach.

 By Brooklyn 

















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11 comments:

  1. Leah16 November 2016 at 12:20

    Hi Brooklyn your writing was amazing...... From Leah����

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    1. Room 9 Wesley Mrs. Alluri16 November 2016 at 15:08

      Thank you Leah for reading my story. Keep visiting our blog we will post more stories of my friends.

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  2. Anonymous16 November 2016 at 14:29

    Hi Brooklyn
    the was such a great story you did really well keep up the great work
    what is your favourite bit of you story and you learn something new from someone the is very special you grandpa
    Lillian

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    1. Room 9 Wesley Mrs. Alluri16 November 2016 at 15:09

      Hi lillian
      My favourite part was when I found the seaweed and my grandpa telling me about it.
      Brooklyn

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  3. Anonymous16 November 2016 at 14:30

    Hi Brooklyn,I like the story you told about going to the beach. I really love how you told us about your day at the beach. Did you know seaweed is the common name for countless species. can you tell me a reason why you went to the beach?
    Thanks Lily from Papakuara central school

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    1. Room 9 Wesley Mrs. Alluri16 November 2016 at 15:11

      HI Lily
      I never knew that. Thanks for telling me. I went to the beach because it was holiday time and i went to spend my time at my Grandpa's house.
      From Brooklyn

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  4. Anonymous16 November 2016 at 14:31

    Hi Brooklyn,I like the story you told about going to the beach. I really love how you told us about your day at the beach. Did you know seaweed is the common name for countless species. can you tell me a reason why you went to the beach?
    Thanks Lily from Papakuara central school

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  5. Anonymous16 November 2016 at 14:32

    Hello, Brooklyn! We're both from Papakura Central School. You must've had a amazing time at the beach! You have a wonderful Grandpa that knows a lot about seaweed.
    By Tara and Jessica.

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  6. Anonymous16 November 2016 at 14:33

    Hi Brooklyn great work on your holiday writing it is very good you used full stops, capital letters you used adjectives and put a picture I really like your work well done.
    From Abby

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  7. Room 9 Wesley Mrs. Alluri16 November 2016 at 15:13

    THank you Abigail

    From Brooklyn

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